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| Arichos 2005-12-08 ch 1,  | abuseYour words paint a brilliant picture. Very vivid, very compelling. |
| Boom Kitty 2005-11-05 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. You imagery in this was stunning, it felt so real, and at the same time so surreal. I haven't read anything that made me feel that. Which is a good thing :P |
| rrmehta364 2005-11-03 ch 1, | abusesorry, but what exactly did the line "Heart tapping out a foreign, stumbling tattoo" mean. other than that, i really like the tone of this poem. kind of mystical like, very good. |
| HauntedMisery 2005-10-29 ch 1, | abuseThis is great, awesome work! |
| Nothing Profound 2005-10-23 ch 1, | abuseSo going on my favorites list. That is all I have to say. |
| Squishy Lucius 2005-10-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is truely a great piece of writing here...the mood was so mystial and enchanting. Every line has a meaning and your description! man, your description was amazing! It has a mysterious aspect to it and even then i can see the sadder tone..the lonliness. "Heart tapping out a foreign, stumbling tattoo That threatened to stifle, to overwhelm"Awesome personification here, it really makes the whole poem come alive and so much clearer to visualise as a reader. Really really enjoy reading your poems...Keep up the wonderful work! _Me |
| Alankria 2005-10-18 ch 1, | abuseVery very good. I loved the descriptions, and though I didn't quite get was going on, the mystery makes it darker. |
| Astarayl 2005-10-16 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful imagery.. it's bittersweet, but not in a typical way.. you've conveyed an inexplicable mood here- "Her world wheeled, Twirling softly, Spinning on its broken axis" Just amazing. Good work on this piece. |
| Elizabeth Ebony 2005-10-15 ch 1, | abuseTotally beautifully amazing.I adored it-lost for words.Imagery is lovely. E.Ebony |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-10-13 ch 1, | abusewow~ pretty~ stars are so magical~~ lovely work keep writing! |
| NOLONGERSERVICING 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseamazing imagery...i love it! |
| forgottenmoon831 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseWoW, that was beautiful! Such a great feeling is displayed here! Oh, and thanks for the review! |
| lovelyhead 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseI think this is your best work, honestly the descriptions are something amazing. You have an original style, and you manipulate the words very well. I normally don't like poetry at all, I find it too short and brief for my liking, but this poem was an exception. I think that your poetry will take you places! P.S. Thanks for all the great reviews for Swish! |
| Emmytastic gal 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseWOW. thats incredible. I LOVE this poem. The change in emotions makes it so interesting. Your use of words are so very eloquent and beautiful. Keep up the fabulous work. write on,-Em |
| Pure Autumn 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem - deep very deep :) |