Your words paint a brilliant picture. Very vivid, very compelling.

Beautiful. You imagery in this was stunning, it felt so real, and at the same time so surreal. I haven't read anything that made me feel that. Which is a good thing :P

sorry, but what exactly did the line "Heart tapping out a foreign, stumbling tattoo" mean. other than that, i really like the tone of this poem. kind of mystical like, very good.

This is great, awesome work!

So going on my favorites list. That is all I have to say.

This is truely a great piece of writing here...the mood was so mystial and enchanting. Every line has a meaning and your description! man, your description was amazing! It has a mysterious aspect to it and even then i can see the sadder tone..the lonliness. "Heart tapping out a foreign, stumbling tattoo

That threatened to stifle, to overwhelm"Awesome personification here, it really makes the whole poem come alive and so much clearer to visualise as a reader. Really really enjoy reading your poems...Keep up the wonderful work! _Me

Very very good. I loved the descriptions, and though I didn't quite get was going on, the mystery makes it darker.

Beautiful imagery.. it's bittersweet, but not in a typical way.. you've conveyed an inexplicable mood here-

"Her world wheeled, Twirling softly, Spinning on its broken axis"

Just amazing. Good work on this piece.

Totally beautifully amazing.I adored it-lost for is lovely.

wow pretty stars are so magical lovely work

keep writing!

amazing imagery...i love it!

WoW, that was beautiful! Such a great feeling is displayed here! Oh, and thanks for the review!

I think this is your best work, honestly the descriptions are something amazing. You have an original style, and you manipulate the words very well. I normally don't like poetry at all, I find it too short and brief for my liking, but this poem was an exception. I think that your poetry will take you places!

P.S. Thanks for all the great reviews for Swish!

WOW. thats incredible. I LOVE this poem. The change in emotions makes it so interesting. Your use of words are so very eloquent and beautiful. Keep up the fabulous work.

write on,-Em

awesome poem - deep very deep :)