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| Interesting 2008-09-05 ch 4, anon. | abuseThis was so beautifully written. I enjoyed it =) Excellent job! I always adored the story of Apollo and Daphne ^^ |
| Edalene Athene 2008-05-14 ch 2,  | abuseYay!! What i meant to say in the last review was that the Greek name for Venus is Aphrodite so if you are going to use the Greek form for the other gods in the proluoge (Eros & Apollo) then use it for all of them! Good job, though a little too much running. Got a little repeditive. |
| Edalene Athene 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseHmm, I like it. Just one thing, use either the Greek or the Roman names for the gods, not a mixture of both. Roman |
| cassandra12271 2007-04-27 ch 4, | abuseEncore! Love the story! It was awesome! Yeah, you really couldn't extend the story, the story was long anyway. Awesome story! Rock on! |
| cassandra12271 2007-04-27 ch 3, | abuseFun chapter to read. I'm enjoying it. |
| cassandra12271 2007-04-27 ch 2, | abuseWhat a runner! I couldn't run that long! LOL! Cool chapter. |
| cassandra12271 2007-04-27 ch 1, | abuseWow! Apollo is so concieted. I see why Eros has wanted revenge. Interesting chapter. |
| Michaela King 2006-10-30 ch 4, | abuseSo, I want to change what I said months ago... I don't really know what I was talking about. I was just skimming through your stories, thinking I would return the favor to you, when I saw that I apparently already had! So here we go. I don't really see what I meant by casual writing, unless you revised it, which I doubt. This is my favorite story of Apollo and Eros. Okay, you're amazing and that's all that needs to be said. |
| Michaela King 2006-05-07 ch 3, | abuseWell, it is undeniably well-written, but I don't know, maybe it's just because I read this in Latin that I feel like you could've done more... maybe add in more emotion instead of sticking almost exactly to Ovid's rendition. I also did not like your portrayal of Eros as a naughty little boy being scolded by Aphrodite; for me, this myth was about not underestimating his power. Your style, and the dialogue that you give to the characters, alternates between flowery and formal to casual slang. Slang's fine, I'm okay with it, but when you've got it alongside bits of GREAT writing, it seems hurried. My favorite part of this was when Daphne transformed into the tree. I think you captured Apollo's bewilderment and subsequent concession well. |
| Le Bel Artisan 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abusePLEASE! I know everything ends with Daphne becoming a tree and by the way Apollo's beloved tree but... *sniff sniff* you're so talented: can't you continue your OWN "Apollo - Daphne" romance story? I know you can think a sequel to that! PLEASE don't live US like that... I thought this was going to become something MORE than a... SHORT STORY!OK. I know I'm a DRAMA QUEEN... but, think about it, yes?Mm, hope to see you soon... writing maybe a 3rd chapter? *°U°* Yours, H.L.S. |
| Ria Moriais 2005-11-03 ch 2, | abuseWell written. But I think you may have your Gods mixed up. I think the Greek God of love is Cupid. Eros is the Roman I believe. |
| Queen of Irony 2005-10-31 ch 2, | abuseI was under the impression that that was the end of the myth...it isn't? Anyway, wonderfully written! I can't wait for more! |
| Le Bel Artisan 2005-10-30 ch 2, | abuseOh beautiful! Update soon... I Beg You! yours, H.L.S. |
| Michaela King 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseI like this story so far; I look forward to seeing the other chapters. Hopefully they'll be as accurate as this one! Good job |
| Queen of Irony 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseWell done! I'm so glad you've started another story; I'm a fan of the Golden Crown. |