Wow. This is such an amazing poem.

this is amazing. brilliant! go you! i applaud you and the fact that you know what you want, and will 'follow your own rules' woop woop!it gives a brilliant impact, hey, it affected me!

Lovely piece of writing.

"but the leader is a coke-snorting-warmongering-ultra-conservative-pric k" fantastic phrase. I love it.

"Is it really my fate to put on a suit and a smile and sacrifice my soul?" lovely phrase. so true. please don't.

"Or perhaps maybe I could / learn how to use a machine gun / and smile as i kill the ennocent people who just happened / to live in the right place at the wrong time / I'm sure then I'd be accepted / respected / decorated / Hell, I might even get a fucking parade" This part really horrified me, but it should, and I'm glad it did.

nice ending. Keep writing!

Aw, I loved it.

And don't let them call you weak. They don't know weak until they've experienced you're pain. That is when will know weak, when they are weak themselves. But you, you're strong to me.

You can sum this all into 2 words : society sucks. I bet on Jupiter they don't have rules to follow. That's a good idea - I'm gonna move to Juptier :D

I love the realism in this poem though..

-freak from the corner

This rocks, great job!

i love the first stanza thing! it just made my day! this was very well said! i like it alot!

hey, like ur poem,its...expressive. i wrote one too, wanna see? lol. bye, thanxs

I love it! Well done! Keep writing!