lots of quiet heartbreak in this. the verse "but I fell/ into myself/ so my downfall could begin" is particularly good.

mezzie

I am not a poet I will say that from the start but I think this is brilliant all the same. You have some very good descriptive lines here. Describing the beach as velvet is a lovely touch. Cuts scars into my soul is very emotional and makes it clear how deeply the author is affected by the place. The whole thing is tight, succinct and for want of repeating myself, to the point. Well done!