| Reviews for Mummy's Wise Words |
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Persis 10/31/05 . chapter 1 I don't consider them "wise words". All mothers say them! Except mine... Haha! |
djsaxon2 10/12/05 . chapter 1Now my instincts tell me to say 'What are you, seven? Get over it.'. Still, i know the feeling you're trying to express, you just need to find a way to do it.. better. In line with trying to keep all criticism constructive, i suggest replacing all the lines with completely different, much better lines. Based on your other work, yu're capable of it, and while i think this is just one bad piece amongst many good ones, this is dissapointing. Sax.[reviews are appreciated] |
mistiqe 10/12/05 . chapter 1Oh my! This made me smile. I would have classified it under life/humour. ;) the exasperation is heart-felt. And the rhythm helped made it a jaunty piece. Also, I like the way each stanza is basically the same. It aids in communicating the frustration. mistiqe. ) |