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| naxa 2006-02-08 ch 7,  | abusegreat! super great! keep going please please please! |
| Safekht 2005-12-10 ch 4, | abuseA few grammatical errors, but nothing some revises wouldn't fix. As always, seems pretty decent, if not exceptional with the storyline, but some of the credit you give it in places seems lacking. I don't know, maybe it's just me that sees that but I'd thought I'd add it in for good measure. I'm looking forward to what you have in store for these characters, and I'd like to see more of this kind of work in the future. |
| Wylderaven 2005-12-08 ch 4, | abuseI'm intrigued! I like the characters, and I'd definitely say it's an original idea. I'm curious. Keep it up. :) |
| Marcel Pellerin 2005-11-22 ch 3, | abusetry for some longer paragraphs |
| Marcel Pellerin 2005-11-22 ch 2, | abuseat first i was iffy about the whole animal thing...but i like how you made it painful to look human...not everything is easy eh. also the grammar was a lot better in this chapter; it was much easier to read |
| Marcel Pellerin 2005-11-22 ch 1, | abuseit's intresting...but you have to reread this before you post it. there are many places where there should be spaces; also try to work on your grammar a bit. |
| KPxL337b0i 2005-11-20 ch 2, | abusehey...nice...it's a pretty good story and i hope you continue with it...only things...i caught a few minor typos in the first chapter..near the end...but nothing serious...overall...nice work... |
| Faithless Juliet 2005-11-06 ch 1, | abuseThis is really good; I like it, I hope that you continue with it. Juliet. |