I love this story! There are some things that could be fixed, though, as you write, such as putting an "and" instead of using commas. In other words you are overusing commas a bit.
Also, prehaps you could elaborate a bit on lizardmages? Who is the "he" the lizardmage mentioned? Do the human and lizardmage serve Delaney? Just some things to keep in mind.
Please update soon!

Great story! Please update soon!

sounds interesting.

update soon

wow. cool story. a little wishy-washy from time to time, but i like it ^-^
-Myst

great story! but is that it? it's kind of a open ending. read al my stories and review alpha. the stone of knoliage

It seems promising. I like how it sounds so far, but slow it down just a bit. Um...here's a technique I learned in my English class: don't use the verb "to be" so much.

- (am, are, is, was, were, to be, being, been) - try not to use them too much. It really helps writing. Just a helpful hint.

- MoonFire-01

GREAT! it's mee! say i have a few questions what kinds of stories dose this website take?

the chapter was great are you going to make more storys about her and her advenyures

pretty good. THe puppy thing should be limited to the main charicder.it makes the bad guy seem crueler, and more intersted in the MC. Also, a little more into the thoughts and opinions of the main charicder on her situation would be nice.