After reading this poem through I few times a like it, a lot. My only criticism is that the first time a read it felt like the writer was trying too hard, takeing themselve a little too seriously. By the second time i read it appreciated the rhythm/ rhyme and the eerie feel of verse. I think overall i would just suggest to slightly simplify to avoid any feelings of artistic pretention. But I do really like itand you have something very good going

wow...I like the way you used rhyme in the poem to steady the rhythm. The last stanza was my favourite tho...it was really philosphical.

I love the story of the narcissist. And I adore this poem. It's beautiful. Especially the ending. But the line that hit me hardest was "Kiss, the brilliance of a reflection fading". That's just perfection. The whole thing has this dreamy feel, but there's somehow such a sense of reality... I love it. Wonderful work, never stop writing.

o! Creepy! I love the rhyming. And the feel to the poem too!

It sounds like something that should be read in the beginning of a fable.

Awesome. Great imagery, nice flow, and a wonderful ending. Brilliant!

very beautiful and captures the topics perfectly in a positive light!

Excellent. This poem is so beautiful...I have nothing to say.

Pure brilliance.

beautiful... well done.. I like it a lot

(ps. if you have the time could you tell me which of my poems you like best.. I'd really appreciate it. Thanks!)

these poems are all so beautiful, yet tragic, you have amazing talents as a writer, keep it up

this is very good , i like the way it flows.

Just... WOW.

Oh my, this poems was just so... Amazingly well done. It was so captivating. Very, very, very, very good job.

P.S: Thank you for your reivew to my poem.

Thats nice that you dedicated a poem to her! It is a nice peom, so I guess everything is nice! :)

He lived a double life...perhaps more than that. He got drunk over the weekend at a party with mostly girls. But he acted humble and reserved, and I wanted to scream and tell him I knew everything. He didn't see his true reflection, only the reflections of those around him. But I was like that too.

Keep writing.

rich, detailed, dreamy sumptuous writing, it is not like a science paper, I do not always know what is happening or intended, but it is drifting and artful, a natural force like a powerful eddying current in deep cold salt water amid sheer rock outcrops. dc

What do mean 'hope this poem was up to standard'? IT WAS AMAZING! o_o

you are scarily good, you know? its like, you can write a poem about anything - its just so cool!

i love how everything flows so well here and its so...yeah...very cool! Thanks so much for reviewing me and i'd like to see more of this coming soon...

i have a request...do you think you could write something about the poppy? (flower?) you know, like in 'flander's fields, where the poppys grow; between the crosses row on row?' that whole topic is interesting…a war poem…try it…

or, you could write about a poppy as in the flower itself…and yeah…somewho relate that to the issue above in a curious and clever way…maybe this guys is wearing a poppy, and is describing it, and then at the end we realise he is at a funeral/remembering/ceremony for the ppl that died…if you want to, that is…its just an idea…

What ever you, I want you to have fun in whatever you write and I want to see more great stuff coming! Ok? And thanks for reviewing…it was nice of you to do so…D

Tabitha The Great XD