I just found this poem like two years later, lol, but I still had to review it. I love this form of poetry, where you use punctuation to emphasize words. I think it looks really cool, and it works to show the importance of certain words. And I also love how this is a circular poem, and you could keep reading it forever. So cool. Keep writing! :)

Oh my...thjis one's kinda explicit... Old men have slime? The ** metaphor for a puppet isn't neccesarry for al whores. They aren't forced. Alot of the times you wind up being more of a dominatrix, tell em' where to go, what to do...the old guys especialy, all they know how to do is stick it in somewhere. Besides they LOVE to be controlled...it's a disgusting battle of control and some perverts idle pleasures and fantasies...prostitution isn't selling yourself, not at all, (unless your a virgin) it's giving to the poor and pathetic, 250 bucks-do this. you take the money and kick em' onto the bed with those slutty-** shoes. Bu-dum... I went on a tangent!-coon

beautiful. Dark and cheap and lovely.

it seems to me like the poem could be read over and over again and it'd make sense backwards too. hmm...

brilliant title & equally brilliant poem. it screams something so raw & tangable, but makes it so very beautiful. flawless perfection, that is what I'm left to say.

~* noelle

amazing title; amazing poem.

wow. it does kind of read like a child and a pedophile, but the way you made those words dance for you was pretty cool. I applaud your morbidness. ^_^

brilliant. flawless. absolutely ** amazing. what else can i say? i love your writing.

o.O Okay...its this about a little girl and a pediphile? Cause that's what it reads like.

I like the way you wrote it, all broken up and all, very nicely evocative. But seriously...is this about a pediphile?

~CR