Mm. Interesting. I rather like the idea...

All in all, not shabbily written. I couldn't find anything wrong with it--except that the ending doesn;t really give me closure. I have no idea what would, though, if I think about it.

Anywhoo, very nice. Can't wait to peek about in you other writing.

I just read your fiction for the first time. I'm pretty impressed, I think you have a lot of talent.

Stick with it!

This is so cute. I'd give you a "well-rounded critique" like it says to do at the bottom of this nifty little window, but my head hurts and I've just inhaled a dangerous amount of Halloween candy. So ha.