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| The Watched 2005-12-12 ch 1,  | abuseWow. Just wow. Graphic, but it really works. "She's plain and tall and shameless" is a brilliant opener, too. |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2005-10-15 ch 1, | abuseThe title of this didnt give away the dark secrets the piece revealed. Sickening almost in the grim life of someone living a lie in two different lives. Your imagery was vivid and you didnt leave tons to the imagination, but I think it left it worked because it made me cringe as I read further down to the last few lines. makes you wonder why... Favorite line would have to be: "Fine on tuesdays and wednesdaysBut thursdays are for hanky-skirts and mini-shirts and lipstick the colour of irrate dick" Just completely gives a sense to her uncontrol of who she is. Irrate... *shivers* almost her whole personality...or change. Just my thoughts anyways. I thought it was well written... good flow... unique... bravo to you. Write on! |