Hello. :)

Right then, I should tell you that I came by this story through LordMasterKris on LJ.

I reviewed 'Money', Kris' short story, and heard from him that the two of you are writing a series together, revolving around the character of Dave, and your character JJ from 'The Midnight Hour'.

Ofcorse I rushed over to read the story. If I'm gonna read this impending 'fic series of genius' I had to read about JJ.

Let me tell you, I'm glad I did, because now that I've read about both characters:Dave - utterly crazy, ice cold killerJJ - bitter, dangerous mavrick cop

I can see the unbelievable potential.

Each chapter a different view point?

Readers sizzling with tension as both sides of the law try to outsmart eachother and stay one step ahead of the game?Not knowing who to root for? As the cops get closer to their prize your willing Dave to get away, but when we see what's going on with JJ, were rooting for the cops to come through. Because we like 'em both.

This could be a helluva story. Serious excitement.

Now then, as for 'The Midnight Hour' itself.I truly enjoyed this story. I could see it all happening as it was told and I loved the humor that came into play. Some great one liners here.

There was alot of detail in the storytelling, and the plot carried forward with a nice pace, it moved everything along with a nice flow.

It's obvious that you worked hard at this, because it's gripping, interesting and pretty impressive for a one shot, if you ask me.

Can't wait for the crossover series. I have no idea who's side I'm gonna be on after reading this... ;)

Your newest fan - Sireniris

Wow well done dude. Loved this one shot its probably one of the best things i have read...EVER! Can't wait to read Kris and your's story. Well hope you put up more stuff.Ryan

Wow. . . I don't know what to say. That was just fantastic! The dialogue was amazing. . .before they stormed the place the arguing and stuff was great. The description was brilliant as always. And that's about as many positive adjectives as I can think of. . .

There were a couple of instances where words weren't separated, andthestoryreadalittlelikethis, but it's no biggy, no one's perfect.

I think in gereral its better to make chapters around half that length (of course, one shots are kind of different). I find that without chapter breaks, its hard to keep someone's attention for that long. You did a good job of keeping me entertained though.

kudos, Kris.