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| bansira 2006-06-15 ch 12,   | Woah, this story is really great! The characters are really touching, I love it so far! You write pretty well, keep it up! :D |
| siham the archer 2005-11-17 ch 12, | Oh my goodness I haven't reviewed in forever and I have no idea why. I love this story and where it's going. Everything just seems so normal... haha. Go ahead and update and I will review next time... |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 8, | :O I want Ria and Caden to hook up. -nodnod- I can see it already... -gets all starry eyed- Well, lovely chapter again! And quite amusing. :D Keep it up and update soon! |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 6, | Caden's boldness makes me happy. We... And stuff. I think I'll just go.. read more now.. yea. |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 5, | Hahaha, replace every word with beep. Oh that'll be great... :D On to the outside world! |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 4, | Yea! Adventure time! -gets out cloth thingy and attaches it to stick- I'm ready! ;D |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 3, | ! Breaking out! Oh yay woo here we go. This'll be exciting. I like how quickly this story is setting off. :D Usually stories take forever and it drives me... crazy. |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-24 ch 2, | OH! Caden's a guy! -cough, cough- Ah, sorry about that one. Ahem. Anyway, you really show this Phinx guy's character well. I like him. He's funny in a... swearing... way. :D I can already tell that he'll be someone that'll amuse me very much. |
| Queai Kumosse 2005-10-23 ch 1, | I thought I'd do some writer's etiquette and review you back. :) I like the way you had Caden see Phinx. It reminds me of Ryan and Danielle, in their own... Special... Ryan and Danielle way. Ahem. But this is about your story... Yes. It was cool how they clicked so quickly. Usually I don't see that happen often, with friends or relationship-peoples, but it happened to me once! So it's always cool having that connection. And uhh... That's all for this chapter. :D I'll get to reading your other ones soon. And maybe some other stories, because I like your writing style so far! |
| siham the archer 2005-10-22 ch 4, | Like the story and how it's written.. I've wrote a story like this before, the two views thing anyways. But just one thing... you said Caden was 17 right? And then you said Phinx was 2 years older... Wouldn't that make him 19 and considered an adult? |
| I can't believe it's over 2005-10-16 ch 4, | hurry up with the next chapter!! i wanna here how they break out etc. good chapter by the way! keep writing :) |
| I can't believe it's over 2005-10-16 ch 3, | i like how caden says amen after every entry/chapter. good chapter! onward i go... |
| I can't believe it's over 2005-10-16 ch 2, | hahaha i loved this line 'One rarely saw the opposite sex and this was strictly maintained. It was as if they were terrified of hormonally charged teenagers rocking on sex and spreading diseases simply by sitting next to each other.' i just thought that was so funny. what complete oppisites these to make! well great chapter! keep writing :) |
| I can't believe it's over 2005-10-16 ch 1, | first offlove the title, very cute secondlya.m.a.z.i.n.g it flowed very well and i could picture your story as i read. i will try to read as much of the story as i can! thirdkeep writing :) |