|Reviews for The Crab And The Crucifix|
| Cyssel 10/30/05 . chapter 1
haha I chose crab because in the real miracle that took place to St Francis Xavier, it was a crab. Plus the species of crab that brought back his crucifix is known as the Crucifix Crab, which has a cross on its shell. That explains the line 'Its great shape resembles that on my back.'
| really 10/30/05 . chapter 1
the way you use short sentences and make a particular effort to punctuate every statement, regardless of using fullstops or commas- this creates an effect of "thought" which is quite soothing, because it seems as if the speaker is thinking and this poem is formulated by its thoughts. especially so with fullstops because it gives one a sense of finality.
however, significance of crab? could be a lobster too you know. (unless you wanted it specifically to be Crab and Crucifix because both started with 'c')
| mizu no kokoro 10/19/05 . chapter 1
wow... the idea was so, amazing... so very imaginative too! aweosme work
| magicbubble 10/17/05 . chapter 1
Whoa. This is like the first time I'm reading about a crab. It's interestingly dreamy considering it's from a crab's point of view. Very refreshing, and the imagery is beautiful!
| Ohmm 10/17/05 . chapter 1
oh I love the way you put it!
one good point is how you don't use particularly complex vocabulary, but words that serve to convey what you want to say and that's just beautiful. I was particularly struck by "it has been done before, by different hands, but the same face".
| youzi 10/16/05 . chapter 1
Ok here goes..I promise that it'll be terribly long (if nothing else).
As mentioned in previous reviews I really like the running-on lines of your pieces..and the effect (suspense? tension?) it creates between one line and the next. E.g. "other droplets,/Downwards" where the direction of the descent is revealed only in the next line (so you sort of have to hold your breath while "falling")..haha, nvm i'm rambling. Thank you for explaining St Francis Xavier and the idea of the crab to me..I was getting a bit confused due to my ignorance..haha. I'm not too sure if I read right, but I found it interesting that you wrote from the crab's perspective..and your characterization of the er..crab..is particularly poignant (quite human,actually, is that the intention?) in the 3rd stanza.. where the line "they are known for terrible deeds" is both ambiguous and yet strangely comprehensible (lol..whatever this means..). Not too sure if I like the description of the crucifix as "wooden and authentic", but i have no idea why...maybe it's the "authentic" that bothers me..but maybe i can see why. Nvm that was a bit more rambling. I'm not sure if a religious person would read it in the same way as a non-religious person (like me) would, but i think it be vastly more meaningful for the former group who would at least know the context of this piece..Nonetheless there was something moving about the majesty of the described scenes such as "The sea is a troubled storm itself " and "The sea is startled and drowned by such a holiness"..and the crab (persona?) is strangely easy to identify with because of its conflicted thoughts (not sure if this is a misreading again)..which is why I said i thought it was quite human..
er..that's all i think. I actually also like the last line abt the "if only I were a human", but I shall not talk abt it since I cannot coherently explain why I like it :(sry abt all the rambling.. how LONG this review is.
keep writing D
| Faithless Juliet 10/16/05 . chapter 1
I love how you played with this story and how it evolved in your own words. It really had such a captivating mood to it; I've never read anything quite like it. Keep up the good work.