I loved the building up of obsession and crushing of the dreams.. All works perfectly well together with the pace. Can be very personaal )

fleur

That you classify transparency and a person's true self into different categories is an interesting concept. I've never thought of it like that before.

I think that I like the first stanza the best. It's just pure feeling, similar to but not interchangable with emotion. Not in this piece, anyway.

Wistful, sad, frustrated, scared, almost content -if only for a moment. Complex and simple. It was worth reading.

'Til next,

CD 1.0

nice. I like the second verse and the last lines "The person that I really am And not transparency…" the whole poem is good.

Interesting...makes me think a bit. Keep writing. God bless, Katja.

tragically beautiful, loved it