You should definitely update this... You've got something going here. It's strange how people mostly think Adam and Eve's children stopped at Cain and Abel and Seth.

Beautiful...simply breath-taking. You did a wonderful job. Merry Christmas, E.

I'm really fascinated by your portrayel of Cain. I guess you're aiming to justify him a bit? The writing's good--flows easily, and the characters are interesting so far. I liked the description of Adam. But speaking of description, maybe you could tell us more details about everyday things...like the house or cooking utensils. It's just that this time period is so strange, I don't know anything about it and I'm relying on you, the writer, to make atmosphere. But anyway, please write more! *faery tragedy

hey! i decided to go ahead and check this out on your recommendation, i really like it so far...all things antediluvian fascinate me, especially possible links between pre-flood language/hebrew which you seem to have explored somewhat. i always thought it rather tragic that the first child born was the first murderer...you characterize him well, and manage to create a relationship between him and chawah (i know, the whole incest aspect is always really weird) without it being too forced. please continue...

I am always shocked by the beauty of your stories. You are a wonderful writer, and you weave a story that keeps one wanting to read more, unable to wait for the next word. Anyway, congratulations and I look forward for more.

This is wonderful so far. You use your words to paint such vivid images and characters. I especially liked Chavva's feeling of invisibility - it's very real and moving.

I am very interested to see the evolution of these people, and the development of Chavva's relationships.

Wow! I really like this...your details and description are excellent and your subject/plot is very rare and unique! I like the relationship between Cain and Chavvah...I am also interested to see how the bond between Chavvah and Abel will be when the latter grows older. Keep writing!

This was an interesting idea. Most of your details were well done, but I may say that - as your descriptions were wonderful - some things were a little unclear. Some time it may be good to go back and re-read whats written, fixing some of the awkward sentence patterns etc.

Mack

This was breathtakingly good. Truly--I loved this! Hats off to you!

That's very sad. Does it actually explain Why though, or is this intended to remain ambiguous?

I think it worked well though, and I'll have to look out for some more of your work.

Wow, very good. I enjoyed this.

You remarked that little is known of antediluvian Eden and so I suggest getting the book "Adam and his kin." Sure, much of it is speculation, but it is educated speculation. Local libraries often carry this. Check it out :)