gorgeous and oh so in this poem is perfect.

lyric and beautiful

I love the alliteration.

loved the wordplay in "unseen unheard unsung" and also the line about the " inevitability of a newton's cradle". do keep writing :D

the ending is ever so poignant, and the whole poem seems so surreal, accompanied by the beautifully painted imagery.

we fall out and fall in and dip out of your illusions as you sing us lullabies to sleep.

wow.

i'll wait for the next eternity too!

This was quite beautiful. I love the cryptic imagery, and it just has this cold-coffee, dusty morning serenity. So well written.

powerful detail and as always gorgeous imager/diction.

* noelle

Powerful detail, I loved the story telling in this; how it evolved through each verse. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.