i really like the way this is written. it just makes you think. it's very distinctive, the style. i like the last line in the first stanza. . . it just hurts. and i love how you can make it hurt so discreetly. though i don't like the way it ends, it's still nice. i think it would be impossible to think of a perfect ending for a poem like this, because it takes a lot to write something this good. nice.

W-O-W. That was so beautiful. Such elegance captured in so little words. I can feel so many of the emotions running through me. (No, I'm not crazy or anything.) But this was created and written really,really well. Awesome job!

i didnt think this was cheesy at all, maybe just a bit cliche - but still, i really liked it. great job. thanks for the review.