it is pretty easy to relate to the speaker's struggle with the suicidal ideations lurking in her head as it is something we all feel at one (or at every) point in our lives. and the fact that she doesn't want to die but that one part of her is making her surrender to the inevitable notion that it is the only way out, makes the reader sympathize with her more.

but i really wouldn't wanna be in colette's position if i could help it. i would really hate to be haunted by the thought that if i had just been there, things would've been just a tad bit different.

nice piece ^_^

I tend to regard suicide pieces with much scrutiny, as it is very difficult not to make them sound melodramatic or cliched.

There's a lot to be said for your use of putting some words in bold - like 'it', 'them' and 'some of them'. The euphemism conveys how uncomfortable the character is about suicide (and so she should be).

I'm not sure whether I like the fact that first letters in each sentence and the letter 'i' aren't capitalized. It can be used as a stylistic feature, but in this case it doesn't do a lot for the tragic dignity of the piece.

One thing I'd change would be the fact that at the beginning the character says she can't kill herself, then at the end that she will. If she was writing a suicide note, she'd write it with the sole intention of killing herself.

If you find this review a bit critique-heavy (especially after such a nice review you posted for my 'Chronicles of the Piggle Wiggle' poem), please don't take it personally (although I have written a poem on the theme of suicide, myself). It's not really my favourite theme to read. But hey - everyone has different taste, right?