Its so hard to move on sometimes, this gets better and better as it goes on "Because now we understandAnd now…we cannot forget…"I like that last phrase

hey, Joana!

This was really good. I like the way you utilize short lines, it works well and has a really big effect on the message!

Kudos to you! Keep up the great work!! I'm proud of you! lol Can't wait for another poem! Toodles!

i think i'm just locked into this videogame mentality right now, so please do forgive me if i'm out of line. it read like something from a video game, like it was inspired by a video game. *shrugs* ... i don't really know what else to say. there were some really good lines and everything but when something comes from a video game i tend to just blank it all. but if i'm wrong about that it's totally my fault. heh. sorry if that's the case and if i'm wrong ignore this entire review.

~k8

*cries* WAH! that was such a sad poem...really good, but sad... *runs off to find more tissues**calls back "GREAT JOB SIS!"*