wow :|. that was AMAZING. i confess myself in AWE of this poem. my god. my god. i cry. i bow. i worship. i reread.

wow, dev. this one's my favourite so far. AH the clothing stanza, put you on the spin cycle, wear you every day. jez, now YOU will be the one who helps ME with my poetry. let's go!

Wow. I don't know what part of this captured me, but I loved it. Maybe it was how honest it sounded; despite the narrator's inability to say I love you, her (I assume her) words are so blantantly truthful, even when she indecisive. Simple word choice, but that worked for you; it in no way detracted from the overall quality, it might have even added.

And I loved the metaphor of him as clothes.

Excellent job (favoriting). Keep writing.

Aw...this is so pretty and sweet, who ever this mystery girl is shes real lucky to have a guy like you! No one writes poetry for me. T.T ne way ~sanch

hey I love the philosophical undercurrent its very subtly placed and it carries the whole poem there is so many levels and beautiful metaphors etc in there I wish I knew the history behind it but just simply its very well written love the Zen thing going on but I would soften up the startling changes between stanzas make it flow in to each other it will help your reader picture your emotion I love the old men in the dust it creates such a really amazing picture Come read me some timeZions Dreamer