Pithy and well-done. I like the rhythm; it makes the old break up concept fresher. The only thing I would have to say is that you misspelled disappointment, but that can be easily fixed.

Again, lovely theme, great style, wonderful technique. The only thing I have to say is: I'm getting depressed, man! Where's the comedy?

Anyway, nice job.

Aye, tis a touching peice. Wish it wasn't so easy to relate to. The idea behind it, I mean. Ah, well. Live, love, die inside and never trust again, as I say. Beautiful work, however. Nice way to make something worthwhile of such an emotion.

Ghosteyes

Simply excellent... I must say this poem spoke to me, as it must have to many readers, because such an experience is common. You managed to put it out in such a different style, with a great rhyme scheme...

Good job... Two thumbs up...

oh, the rhymings are really lovely...and the last two lines are really good...although i think the second to the last line of the first stanza is quite weak...i don't know...you still did a good job...

truly yours...