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| ShadowYellowEyes 2005-10-31 ch 1,  | abuseWhy mystery? Ah, well, to each his/her own. Blank verse, though I'm not sure if it's free yet... Haven't looked at the beat. Pretty sure it's not, as most people don't tend to do that naturally... Just rambling. I'm not the best of poetry critics, but this is very good. You might want to start investigating the effects of punctuation on the rhythm now, as punctuation tells where a reader is supposed to pause. That way, people can totally play with the sounds. I remember hearing a poem read where the punctuation was placed to make the sounds of a horse galloping, galloping, over the bridge, down the street, on and on, on and on. See how it works? Poetry is more than rhyming words together, and that is what makes a great poet. Best of luck in future endeavors, and may God bless you. ~Shadow |
| The Postscript 2005-10-21 ch 1, | abuseAt the funeral, there were many teenagers, grief stricken. I tried to stay strong for my older sister who had had a breakdown at communion earlier in the week. No tear crossed my cheek, even as his coffin lay next to the pew I resided in for the moment. I did feel very sad, but so far all crying had remained in the privacy of my home. As the funeral ended, I went to see an aquantice who I viewed more like my grandfather, wise, patient and loving, more than just an elder. Embraced in his hug, I let my tears go. Who was I to control my emotions? God was in control. Keep writing. God bless, Katja. |