The format of the poem is great...It has a spiral pattern, and an increasingly breathless, suffocating air as it proceeds downwards.

I liek the whole chemicals thing and the ending.. awesome job

Ooh, that last line is creepy (in a good way).

This poem kinda reminded me of that X-Men: Evolution episode where Rogue's own powers became much too overwhelming, and were tearing her apart from the inside, as all the personalities and powers she ever absorbed were fighting to take over.

Well done, kiddo!

i have read this, and it took my breath away. i like how it is written and how it is worded. if i were you, i'd do some more like this

Shadow