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| bambi4real 2006-03-18 ch 2,  | abuseThe ending sounded a bit ominous. I think the pimp is not going to be the best choice for him. |
| bambi4real 2006-03-18 ch 1, | abuseI don't remember getting the first ch in my alert so I was really confused as to what this was at first. When I realized I got really excited. Thanks for continueing. This ch was sad. I mean knowing alittle of his life already I expected it to start off hopeless anyway but to loose his mother like that? It just seems unfair some how. |
| A Caged Mind 2005-12-11 ch 1, | abuseLove it and really like the title. Please write more! Do me a favor and tell me what you think of Blood Bonds... this is sort of pathetic, this begging for reviews in a review, but hey... |
| Meg 2005-11-12 ch 1, anon. | abuseOMG OMG OMG OMG... etc. u cannot i mean cannot end it there!! u MUST go on!! i beg u!! o well time to read more lol luv yaz! Meg |
| Star Kitty 2005-11-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh my GOD! Poor little Benvenuto! Bengal, wasn't it? AW! *glomps Benvenuto and huggles him* So sad! What a bastard! If I knew where that Paulo dude was, I'd... sic Carlos on him! Luke: >_> Not brave enough to do it yourself? Sk: |
| Rainish 2005-10-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. That was powerful writing. I'll add this to my alert list, I am curious to see where this goes. ~Rain |
| An Inside Joke 2005-10-20 ch 1, | abuseYou're right- that is a sad start. Some of your details were unneccessary- in particular, instead of sayig Benvenuto was thin because he was starved, just say he was thin and let the reader fill in the details. Other than that, though, very nice start. |
| Broken doll on a dirty shel... 2005-10-20 ch 1, | abuseGood start...not much to say yet, since he was only beaten and found his mother dead...maybe more when the chapters are a little more extented and more detail is added...maybe when he's out prostituting...I liked it so far though, I hope to see the rest. Harlequin~Please fix me... |