You know... Maybe I am not meant for these kinda things... I won't pretend that I understand, because I don't!

How does Kai and some other people always seem to get what you're trying to get across?? Is it normal to understand these poems (not just yours)? It seems so. So that makes me abnormal or dumb?

Ah Tak faham!!

Huahh...

What is the significance of the red cloth? And while we're at that, what is the significance of the singing children? Puzzling, at best. *frowns* I've given this a bit of thought but those two bits don't seem to go well with the rest of the poem, i.e. I don't get what they're doing here.

The second verse is much more in keeping with the mood prevalent in this piece - depressing and slightly disturbing, almost suicidal. And oh, how can I forget: angry. The anger, wow.

I really like the second verse. There is an image there that keeps on appearing in my mind: the knife and the flower tied to the end of a string bracelet, hanging off of a wrist... maybe not what you intended, but that's what I got from it.

Good job, even if it's cryptic.

br... some really creepy images~ good work

keep writing!

love it. the ending made me giggle like mad though. :) witty, witty piece.

~* noelle

I get the picture of satanic cult. Cute cuddly satanic cult...

hmm... nice use of repetition. ^^. i really like the second half of the poem, the imagery is great. keep it up.