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| Aki 2005-10-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou know... Maybe I am not meant for these kinda things... I won't pretend that I understand, because I don't! How does Kai and some other people always seem to get what you're trying to get across?? Is it normal to understand these poems (not just yours)? It seems so. So that makes me abnormal or dumb? Ah Tak faham!! Huahh... |
| LancerDragoon 2005-10-21 ch 1,  | abuseWhat is the significance of the red cloth? And while we're at that, what is the significance of the singing children? Puzzling, at best. *frowns* I've given this a bit of thought but those two bits don't seem to go well with the rest of the poem, i.e. I don't get what they're doing here. The second verse is much more in keeping with the mood prevalent in this piece - depressing and slightly disturbing, almost suicidal. And oh, how can I forget: angry. The anger, wow. I really like the second verse. There is an image there that keeps on appearing in my mind: the knife and the flower tied to the end of a string bracelet, hanging off of a wrist... maybe not what you intended, but that's what I got from it. Good job, even if it's cryptic. |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-10-21 ch 1, | abusebr... some really creepy images~ good work keep writing! |
| poetic abortion 2005-10-21 ch 1, | abuselove it. the ending made me giggle like mad though. :) witty, witty piece. ~* noelle |
| Drizit 2005-10-21 ch 1, | abuseI get the picture of satanic cult. Cute cuddly satanic cult... |
| Melinda Becker 2005-10-21 ch 1, | abusehmm... nice use of repetition. ^^. i really like the second half of the poem, the imagery is great. keep it up. |