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| fatbird33 2008-08-26 ch 1,  | abusesuper dark! liked the last line though |
| Westeria 2007-12-31 ch 1, | abuse"Heart and Knife" That strikes up so many images...Beautiful |
| Sg16 2007-07-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseo, i like this one best i think =] |
| Hells-a-singing 2007-06-15 ch 1, | abuseholly **! this is perfect and only three lines! wow...whoa this is just awsome |
| Cross Rose 2007-05-28 ch 1, | abuseI really loved it. I'm not sure why...but I just do. |
| LivingAngel37 2007-05-03 ch 1, | abuseIt get's right to the point. It hit me deep when I read it the first time. Good job |
| The Cowardly Lion 2007-04-27 ch 1, | abuseI like this. It's short and I would say sweet...no. I will say sweet. Short. Sweet. Suicide. I read your profile. We have a lot in comon. -hugs- Kate |
| O.r.i.g.i.n.a.l.isn't.My.st... 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseLol, well as you know (since you even wrote it in your summary) and as you 've probably been told from other reviewers, your poem is not a haiku at all, period. lol, though it's very close to the format of 5-7-5, but anyway, we'll just call it a short poem or something of another. Apart from the format of your poem, it was good. You were probably trying to compose a haiku, so that's why you poem is short. Length of poems shouldn't matter, but in this case, your poem could have probably showed something more. Since it was short, it was abrupt and with no background story. The lines are brilliant, but they're somewhat like notes of an outline. It was very clear and got the message across. The ending line was strong (my perfect death..my perfect suicide, heh) and the overall poem was well-written and well-expressed. And I agree with Theallpowerful ^^;~ having the words of "please review" did somewhat ruin the feeling of the poem...lol yet i'm still reviewing...Nice poem, good job, keep on writing ^^ |
| ten bucks and a tire 2007-04-16 ch 1, | abuseEven though it isn't technically a perfect and precise haiku... I really really like it. |
| tearing hands 2007-04-14 ch 1, | abuseI love the line "heart and knife collide". And also the idea that it would be the "perfect death" which is kind of creepy but interesting. Even though it's not in regular haiku form, it's a really good poem. |
| Alameda 2007-04-10 ch 1, | abuseYou seem pretty hyped up over one haiku, even though it's a very rad haiku. I'm a teen. And I'm usually suicidal. That means I relate. Erm, yeah. |
| Experiment 156-SKYE 2007-04-07 ch 1, | abuseWhy do we like to write about such morbid things?!?!? I do the same. I like it. PS A haiku is 5-7-5 not 5-5-7 |
| a silenced revolution 2007-04-02 ch 1, | abuseClassically tragic. I love it. Nice. |
| Slightly Bruised And Broken 2007-03-21 ch 1, | abusei love it! not a lot of words but hits the nail on the head |
| Velvet Reverie 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseAw. I loved the rhyme scheme, for one. And for some reason, this makes me feel...I dunno. I can somehow relate to it. Especially the second line line. |