Loved it bravo (some might say I,m bious)

Good chapter again. Even though it was kinda short. :P But that's alright. It makes for easier reading.

Anyway, watch for spelling mistakes. I caught a few while I was reading over your chapters, i.e. your "there"'s, and "its". Easily fixed though. I also found it interesting that you used "Yei" a lot instead of something like "Yes". No prob. If that's part of the language/culture they have, then I'm good with that.

I guess that's it. I'm interested to see where you take this, it's a fascinating set-up (underground society :P).

Xecenda

P.S. If you get a chance, feel free to check out one of my stories. Thanks.

I like that speech at the end :).

That AB sounds interesting. I like it when people introduce new items or concepts, and leave it up to the reader to guess what they are, using the few hints placed by the author. I think that if you'd gone into detail about what AB was, it would've slowed the story down.

Anyway, good chapter. Reading on.

Hello there,

A nice start. I liked the imagery of the stew :P And the computer's dialogue was pretty realistic, I like that 'punch signal' bit. An orignal way to describe long-range communications.

Anyway, keep it up. :)

Nice descriptions...the stew episode reminded me of some of my ill-fated meals.

Yeah, I've never seen you write Sci-Fi. I don't remember this story, is it very new, or have I just not read it?

So far I really like it. I love the opening, with the burning lump of stew. That creates a great picture to pull people in ^^

I know you have the next couple chapters of this and another story, but I'll have to review those later, sorry ;-; I will, though!