eine klitzekleine positive Aussicht würde dem ansonstn sehr schönen Gedicht gut bekommen.
Mir gefällt auch das Bibelzitat und was du daraus gemacht hast

Wow, I like how you hve used that one verse and then written this one from his perspective.~Beth

Really beautiful. I like how you took that portion of Mark and ran with it. Powerful exploration.

Powerful narriative and detail; well done, I enjoyed it.

Much love,Juliet.

WOW!! This is a really good poem. Great work.