Excellent diction.

Hmm, not bad.

I've a couple of spelling nitpicks, which I hope you won't mind - gnawing, not knawing, and slimy, not slimey.

Your punctuation is interesting, but seems in places a little senseless - not particularly consistant or following any real pattern of emphasis. Ditto some of the language you use, particularly with the larger words.

Very interesting and well-felt, though. Nice structure too. Good job.

i love all of the mythology, (though i must admit i need to refresh myself a bit, some of it was lost on me) and the clash of two different sets of beliefs- the greek and the christian. amidst all of this were your perfectly lovely words- it reads like a steady stream of water. i loved 'she probes the technicolor/northernlights unraveling/ pandora's (mystery) with/ fingertips streaming/screaming/(for) light' best.

i love the ending.. awesome poem

Amazing. I absolutely loved this. Not only is your style incredible, but your word choice and imagery is just so powerful.

The beginning few stanzas were a really good lead-in to the piece.. admittedly, at first glance it seemed somewhat random.. but as the piece grew the meaning fell into place.

There's no criticism I can make.. no criticisms. It's perfect the way it is.. strong, and I love how it builds.. good work.

wow... speechless at this intense poem awesome work

keep writing!

Once again, it is messy, but perhaps that is simply what you enjoy doing.

It seems as though you used "big words" to try and bamboozle the reader into thinking the poem was good.

I'm not saying it's bad, but it's definately not the best piece of work I've ever seen.

honsetly, I can't think of anything to say that hasn't already.

* noelle

this might be one of my new favorites of your work. it is truly stunning. favorites.

it has a certain flow to it, i adore the wording. ((you confuse me. you amaze me.)):i'm lost for words.

I really admire your use of language. (I am well acquainted with Modernism.) Yet I find myself at a lost in trying to figure out what exactly it is you are trying to accomplish, particularly with your use of parentheses. Feel free to contact me and explain it.

super crazy but totally hip. nice formating style.

This is amazing, great work!

Some wonderful imagery once again. It flows nicely.