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The Red Queen04 2005-10-22 . chapter 1
"I walk through winter" is a very nice phrase but I think you have to be careful with it. Winter is a season and seasons change this along with "One I had last December" contradicts your statement that the cold is "eternal." I think that you should consider the consistency of your imagery.
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