In the third stanza: "th" instead of "the" (typo); also, I didn't notice this before, I don't think... "She likes the shades of color,/ But her hair flows more freely/ Than Saturn ever could." ~This doesn't seem to quite follow for me... shades of color --> flowing freely? Just a thought.

Once again, a good poem, THOUGH... maybe you should challenge your math geek to write a poem of his own... see what he comes up with! ;) Keep writing!!