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| Nemonus 2006-03-04 ch 1,  | abuseCool. I like the title a lot, and the emotion is live there. I've never played FF, being a deprived human being. Your imagery is very interesting, the visceralness of emotions. Only this line seemed clumsy;/I’ve moved into the center of the city/.Swords make all things awesome, and that was a relief cause I wasn't sure where the fantasy was going to come into this. Excellent words. |
| Awkward Sylence 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abuseHm. Nice work here. Good imagery. |
| The Inkslinger 2005-10-25 ch 1, | abuseI've haven't seen the movie yet, but I've played FF7... and oh my, so perfect. I cried when she died in the game, and this totally squeezed my heart in the same way *sniffle*. Once again, you write the most lovely poetry. You really do. It's such a relief from my english class... where the sonnets are so insane it's basically "WTF? How can you write a seduction poem with a flea?" I think you have now become my most favorite poet. *much bowing ensues* And this: "You held me in your arms every night / As you never had in life." *cry* So good. Usually I hate love poems more than anything else.. but this one, I actually adore. It's scrumptious. And definitely it is better than all right, you silly fiend. Thank you, Mina! *heart* -inky |