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efphrim 2008-02-02 ch 15,	abuseThird time I've asked: Plz finish the story!
merrymowmow 2007-02-04 ch 15,	abuseI was wondering when you're going to update.
bambi4real 2007-01-02 ch 15,	abuseI just rediscovered this story I used to read it and I just wanted to let you know that i love it. Keep up the good work. Loren is too cute.
Anna 2006-12-30 ch 10, anon.	abuseI've read this story about three times and parts of it have still managed to make me cry. I'm not good at writing reviews (this is only my third one) but I just wanted you to know that I LOVE your story and you've managed to make your characters seem both unique and so real that one might almost expect to meet them in the real world.
keiichisei 2006-12-06 ch 15, anon.	abusegood, GOOD. Don't go back, Loren. Be your hollow broken self and move forward into your meaningless life and empty existence. Boo hoo. Maybe after you spend enough time away from it all you can find a reason to be happy again. Well apparently not since you spent a whole year away from it all and you were just pudgy and miserable. In the end it's your life, if you liked your freedom so much you should have done something with it and found a way to be happy. If you're going to move on you need to actually move on and create something better than what you had before. Just do it, it's all you have left. That and a restraining order on a very beautiful boy who has pledged to follow you anywhere. hugs the author
Sparkle Itamashii 2006-12-05 ch 15,	abuseskjg;fjghsr;nbjdfv.dj;ksjrth sm omg kgn;hjo omgomgomgomg no it's over! I waited so long and now it's over! its like eating a piece of the most delicious, delicious cake on the face of the planet and then you're done and it's gone but it hurts so good inside because it was so rich and wonderful and full of one-eyed pirate typing... For some reason I'm signed in for once. I don't recall signing in, but okay! Anyway, oh my god. Awariye... Holy crap, that scene made my heart do flip flops like mad. I'm back to not being able to figure out who to be saddest for. I know it's Loren, but that's only so long as people are getting angry with him or begging him. I'm still mad at Lili, but I am starting to revert to feeling bad for them, too. They've just got to feel so bad, and I can't imagine not being able to apologize to someone whom I had wronged so deeply. And Loren! My god, coming home to all those presents. He's stronger than he looks. I'd have broken down and just sobbed and piled everything into a pile and done one of two things. Destroyed it all if I was angry enough or sleep on it like a nest if I was sad enough. Or maybe I would sleep on it all and THEN destroy it, just to get a taste of it. Maybe to show I was really mad, I would just not unwrap things and place it all outside my room before I went to bed. But then, I would probably sleep in a cupboard somewhere, because I would know better than to stay someplace where all those people could find me. And it would be amusing to see them fly into a tizzy when they can't find me and then I would appear and be like what I was in the bathroom or something equally inane. Loren! You have such a chance to ** with everyone before you leave them! rolls I guess I still want them to have a chance at getting back to him. Like... Loren said that he can't trust them to not turn on him again but how can he test that? Does he need to? Man, there should be something else where something happens and he gets blamed and everyone is like IT'S NOT LOREN saves and then he knows they aren't lying. But I guess he couldn't know if they believed that or if they were still just guilty, so that's probably a bad idea. Kei reminded us of the quote "The opposite of love is not hate, but indifference." and that's kind of the problem. Loren does love/hate them, but New!Loren is barreling toward indifference. He seems to want indifference so it doesn't hurt him. I can't describe how much I'm looking forward to Warning's foal. So, so looking forward to that. But then, I am in love with Colt a little. He did a terrible thing to Warning and to Loren, but I still like him somehow. trots off to write until you're back with a new chapter ~Sparkle
pivoine 2006-12-05 ch 15,	abuseI'm so happy you've updated! it's been such a long time! I really wish you could finish that story...I love this chapter, and to find again Loren, and his inner struggles, to immerse oneself again in the plot, it was really pleasurable! I hope that Loren will make his supposed brothers suffer or deny them, because well, I simply cannot forgive them! anyways thank you! I just hope you wan't give up on this story!
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-26 ch 14, anon.	abuseoh my god.Loren should be the first one to forgive them because he's the only one that can ever forgive them. They could never forgive themselves if they are truly brothers. Oh my god if I did that, I would give my life to them and it still wouldn't ease the pain. Make them do with me as they please, I'd kill myself if they said they wanted it, anything to make an action that shows how sorry I am, because I can never take away the pain. Oh goodness. Of course Loren's personality may not allow it, but from the love that he holds ('takes love to hate', 'hate is not the opposite of love but indifference')for them I would think he would want to forgive his friends. To prove he is a brother, because he would want (but never ask) for one of them to forgive him if he'd beaten them. But he can't go back, like Loren said in the last chapter, if the trust is broken for that then every time something happens the trust will be broken again. Maybe just for peace of heart, a closing of doors, Loren can forgive them and say goodbye. It's not what they did that makes Loren unable to return, but how he changed from what happened to him. Would the Rankhara really want him back now that he is a different person? If Loren doesn't go back then he has to mature enough to make a better life for himself, not drudging through classes like at the academy. He has to come to terms with his heart and find what he wants, then maybe he can find someone that suits him and give his heart to them. Oh jeez this is just so hard, I can clearly see how Loren could not go back and how he would want to move on, what I can't see is somehow the situation changing so that Loren would want to rejoin the Rankhara and that everything could be joyful again. That is truly the challenge for the writer, if you get me to see that and agree to it I will be amazed at you. And I'll make you sushi, but you've got that coming anyways with how much I love this story... hope this review isn't too long. Will you write the next chapter soon, please? I hope this isn't nearing the end of the story because I am not even CLOSE to being emotionally ready to let go of these characters clings. Great job!
Shibi 2006-05-26 ch 14, anon.	abuseI don't think I could spell my own name right now. I... I... oh... Oh lovely... how could he... I liked Lili, I felt sorry for him when he was pleading with Loren, I thought, there's no way he did anything so bad to Loren that Loren couldn't forgive him. No way. Anything at all, anything he could do to Loren, I couldn't think of any way for him to have done something to Loren, no action he could take against Loren... And then so passively, Kahlili ruined it so horribly. I thought I could side with both sides. I thought that there must have been a way that they could work it out. I knew he got beat pretty badly by some of the boys (although it saddened me to see Sky hold him while they did it... what an awful way to add salt to gaping wounds). I knew he got the cold shoulder. I knew Warning got harrassed by Colt (poor baby!). I had wondered what else there was, what else they might do to him or keep from him... But for Kahlili to turn around and... to just... Oh lovely, I can't imagine how much that hurt. I can't imagine. There is... my... chokes on words Oh Loren. Oh Loren, you should leave again. And Corra, being so rough with words, Skylie, the one who trained him and loved him, Lili... mercy... what about Calle? Where was he? ken Oh, my alley cat, these things you do to me... I can hardly breathe for loving and hating and feeling. I can hardly breathe for wishing Loren could be somewhere safe. If they did it once they have it in their hearts to do it again if the occasion ever arose and how can you TRUST them now? How can you even think you should go back... Oh Loren, walk away as soon as you can and don't look back. I want them to fix it, i want them to make it better but I can't see it. I can't trust them and they didn't even DO any of that to me... whinewhimper more moremoremore snuggles I need to read more soon pleasenowohgodcantwait falls apart
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-22 ch 13, anon.	abuseOh my goodness you haven't updated this since February I can't believe you. I absolutely have fallen in love with this fic; I'm just so interested in all of the men and their relationships with each other it's just so cool. You have my heart in your hands, common get writing I'll send you cookies. I can make darn fine cookies all send them anywhere bribes. Please... puppy eyes You wouldn't do this to a fan of yours would you? hugs awaits your update
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-22 ch 12, anon.	abuseSo this is how it happened, the betrayal of the brotherhood. I feel so sorry for Loren, how could they?! Oh my goodness.
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-22 ch 11, anon.	abuseThis chapter is my favorite so far. I'm really interested in the group love they have going on, it's so different from anything I've ever read or experienced. I'm so sad there are only two more chapters left, I wish there were fifty! Must read on, great chapter.
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-21 ch 10, anon.	abuseOh my, what on earth is going on. I'm hooked I just absolutely love this story, and what is with Loren and Kahlili now, is any of it true? I just can't wait to read more, thank you for such a great chapter.
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-21 ch 9, anon.	abuseOh no. So we finally know how it all happened, this is so horrible. If I were Loren I would feel betrayed by my friends that they didn't even ask for a confession before they beat me up. They trusted each other, right? I would want to hear from Loren why he did it. Must read on.
Keiichi Sei 2006-05-21 ch 8, anon.	abuseOh no, did they accuse Loren of being the spy? That's so horrible! I want to know more about the couplingin the Rankhara, like Loren with Mercy? I totally thought... well I guess I don't know. I love it!

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