wow this is so awesome i love it i love the way the words go together and everthy this is a great piece of work

The simplistic diction directs the focus on the emotion, atmosphere, and mood of the poem. It works well in this case. You pulled it off well. The formatting adds to the intended mood as well. Nicely done!

Wow, I love this. I can really relate. Written simply, but the subject is powerful enough to make up for it. Great piece, keep up the good work!

Hillary ♥