Happy birthday. You're only 14? wow, greater respect from me to you. Your writing is good. THis poem was a little all over the place, but one can't really say a poem is bad without insulting the writers' creativity. This isn't to say it is bad by any means. There were some good lines, and for ten minutes, that's pretty good in my opinion. Keep it up.

Hey, dis is good and honest and ah-ma-zing. N oh yeah, happy birthday!!