Wow..this is absolutely gorgeous writing..I quite love it...and if your shadow won't catch you..THIS SHADOW WILL *hardy har har har* haha...my camp name is shadow....>

i thought the end of this was fantastic but im not to keen on the longer lines in the beginning. Maybe just rework those a little and then it will flow more neatly. Still it was very lyrical. felt like it should be a song. nice! and its a powerful feeling isnt it? when suddenly you find your friends arent there when you need them. you brought that out well in the end. keep writting! -the Lady Elaine

Well, you were asking me a while back which was my favorite poem of yours, and I think this must be a strong contender. The worst situations bring out the best in poets, I guess. I got a lot of "Like a leaf on the wind, watch me soar" out of this, too. That kind of mood, you know. Which is worrying. Please dont be impaled.

omg this is so great! there is a couple at school who need to read this poem because they are going through the same thing... omg you are so great. keep writing, 'k?