 Job Cyclops 2006-08-23 . chapter 1Hey, thanks for your review on my story. Your right, it is sort of personal, because the insomnia, the harsh childhood treatment, and all was real. I've always sort of been the 'freak' in my family, because I look so different.
Pedich Edhellen? *bounces 'appily*
Pelin pedi i lam edhellen.
But just a little. (^;*lalaith*
Bye now! Thanks again! Beautiful poem, it reminisced of LotR, I think. Your descriptions make one feel as if they were there! Good job. |
 fergyness 2005-12-24 . chapter 1i really liked this piece
none of the rhyming seemed strained or forced, and it puts a clear picture in my mind
you also used a unique rhyming scheme which made this all the better
B-E-A-utiful
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 flightless blackbird 2005-11-26 . chapter 1wow that was beautiful. i love it. It flows so well, and although it rhymes, it doesnt seem to be forced. it all just... fits.
~Blackbird |
 Pheobe Meryll 2005-11-06 . chapter 1I absolutely love this and it's going straight to my favorites. I like the symoblism, the beat, the descriptives, everything. Being emtirely nitpicky, the only mar to its rythem was this line, "Nothing to lose, nothing to hide" and only because you had to accent the wrongs syllable. But it's really beautiful. I have got to read more of your work. |
 mizu no kokoro 2005-10-31 . chapter 1a mystical kind of atmosphere~ i guess, we all wish we can be as carefre at times~ good work
keep writing! |
 Ridley Jack 2005-10-28 . chapter 1Not the best poem I've ever read, though I'm not by far any sort of critic. I like it, though. Reminds me of my friend, who's also a dancer. If I had room, you would be on my fave list :P |
 Artemis1860 2005-10-27 . chapter 1woah. i have goosebumps right now. that's amazing. |
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