 bjw 2005-10-28 . chapter 1Beautiful. It has the quietness that your other poem had too, but it's still able to describe your emotions so powerfully... It's so sweet!:) "Not just an embrace,But a word of deeper emotion." Very nice indeed. But I thought the last line was a little redundant; the poem would have more poignance ending simply with "with you". Nevertheless, good job!:) |