excellent story poem format... i think you should try a piece without forcing the rhyme...

this had good flow and I liked how it was story like. Also in some spots you had good imagery.

Hey Jeremy,

Once again, a great part to this sequel. It is really good. I can't wait until the battle actually starts.

Good job. Keep up the good work.

I like it... bit too long to be a poem for my taste... but still good.

Hey, this is a really good story/poem you have going on. It is very interesting and exciting. Can't wait to hear more from you.

You cease to amaze me! There will be another chapter soon. Right? Well if you don't that would really suck. I will be waiting for the next one. Hurry Up!

This is driving me nuts! How do you continue to add onto the story like this? I could never in my life do this type of stuff.

You continue to amaze me. They just keep getting better and better keep up the good work.

You promised me that the second one would be better. Well you did it! This is great

this is awesome. I can not wait until the next chapter.

Hey, good job. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to hear more of this story.

Hey, good job. Keep it up

Good job. Keep adding more, it is really interesting

This is a really good story/poem. Can't wait to hear more.

Hey,

This is a really good part to this sequal. You did a great job of making the reader want more of the story. I can't wait to see what happens next.

Good job.