Ahh, this was insane. I loved how it consecutively rhymed at parts, that made it go very smoothly. You're great.

very clever and slightly strange.

OH MY GOD! THAT HAS TO BE ONE OF THE BEST POEM THAT I HAVE EVER READ! YOU HAVE TALENT THAT YOU SERIOUSLY NEED TO EXPRESSE! Never have I thought I would die because of somthing I read but now I am going to tell all my friends about the wonderful poet I have just found.

that was beautiful. i wasn't sure what it was about. i kind of interpreted it as a trial for a killer, but also business men for some reason... i don't know. that's just what i saw. i'm not sure...but lovely poem.

Awsome. I love the rythm of this poem. Its really interesting, I liked the line, "Only men with coins for eyes." Nice job!

wow. relli deep. i esp like. "will lend you knowledge/brought in time by/men with coins for eyes."and the last verse. relli powerful =D

Freaky but interesting and unique.I love it! Very original idea, lovely repetition and emphasis on some words..and great ending too!Keep 'em coming and write on!

--Meme

Awesome poem. It has a gothic effect to it sort of. Kinda reminds me of the Joker from Batman. Great Job!

Reminds me of The Corpse Bride. :)

This is so COOL. It was creepy, and it had great flow, and I couldn't look away from the page at all. Great job, and I hope there are more like this!

Lol, This Mira likes story/poem alot. It will be sitting in her binder when she can get the printer working. Heh heh...