oh...! i love it! its twisted and wonderfully beautiful. i love the part that says 'needles in our eyes, and bullets in our hearts' it makes me smile. VERY well done you deserve a BIG HUG!

Nicely written--I like it! This kinda thing is waht I love--keep 'em coming!

Quite strong. Well done on this piece. I like the 'Another day's start' stanza. A job well done. Keep writing

~Elle

You know what's funny? The effect of the word 'kiddo' in this piece of writing. Or maybe it just affects me. Anyway, it was good. M.