oh...! i love it! its twisted and wonderfully beautiful. i love the part that says 'needles in our eyes, and bullets in our hearts' it makes me smile. VERY well done you deserve a BIG HUG!

Nicely written-I like it! This kinda thing is waht I love-keep 'em coming!

Quite strong. Well done on this piece. I like the 'Another day's start' stanza. A job well done. Keep writing

Elle

You know what's funny? The effect of the word 'kiddo' in this piece of writing. Or maybe it just affects me. Anyway, it was good. M.