|Reviews for Take me|
| just dani 12/19/05 . chapter 1
| BestSkeptic 12/1/05 . chapter 1
This one used italics more effectively. And it's actually a very good idea. Well executed.
In a response to your irrelevant flame on my quick piece that you didn't even bother to review:1) I probably do know more than you do about effective literature and poetry. But that's not an insult; I've been studying it extensively for a very long time, and I still have much more to learn. I can admit that.2) I wasn't flaming you. I was making a suggestion that could greatly improve your writing. You're a good enough writer to be able to take constructive criticism and not be immature enough about it to become enraged and take it as a flame.3) Yeah, thanks again for not even reading my work but leaving an irrelevant flaming pile of hatred anyway. Much appreciated.
| foreverinshadows 11/29/05 . chapter 1
Awesome! I've never seen such a style before. I like it.
| 364 unbirthdays 11/24/05 . chapter 1
Wow- i'm at a loss of words right now. this is beautiful
| nanashi-04 11/11/05 . chapter 1
Uready, your a genius, this peom is unbelievable.
| mizu no kokoro 11/3/05 . chapter 1
it has a great rhythm to it not too long at all good work
| youzi 11/3/05 . chapter 1
i liked the use of BOLDing here because it drew my attention to specific spots in the whole piece. Don't let the formatting detract from the writing though. Do keep writing D
| Monique 10/30/05 . chapter 1
Eric. genius. beautiful. raw. BRILLIANT
| citrus scented 10/30/05 . chapter 1
wow this is a very powerful piece of writing. "take meto where the i’s and t’s don’t have to be crossedor dotted
or even written"- thought provoking too, i love that stanza- I can really relate to it. theres so much power to this all, a sort of ache and longing drummed in again and again with the "take me". wicked piece, and some hauntingly beautiful imagery.
| SKgus 10/30/05 . chapter 1
eric, your poem is awesome; you're awesome
and one day, we're going on a tour of those countries ]