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| darkmiko 2007-01-01 ch 1,  | abusegood job. it has a nice flow to it. I especially like the "Remember that time When we raced and I won You wouldn’t admit that you lost Now race issues aren’t about who’s the fast one" i don't know why but it really hits me. you did an excellent job, keep it up |
| melissa 2005-12-06 ch 1, anon. | abusehey! this is a good poem!! heehee...lovely lovely lovely. xD |
| chopping_chopstix 2005-11-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw! THats a very good poem. I like it. I should print it out and decorate it. You know what? you should try submitting that in school That would be pretty cool. Well. Maybe im overreacting. Oh well. I still think its a really nice poem! > |
| Saxifrage 2005-10-30 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful poem. it's so sad...but so true. I'm sorry that you and your friend aren't that close anymore, also. I wrote a poem about being young and growing up. It had the same basic idea, but yours sounds much much better. Maybe you'll read mine one day... I s'pose all "grown-ups" (or people who have recognized the reality in life) wish for the innocent ignorance we felt as a child. It scares me sometimes to think of all those children who didn't ever have that though...abused and broken. but now i'm a little off topic... well, anyways, beautifully dark poem. I love it. Keep writing! xoxo--Saxifrage |
| Bunnie09 2005-10-30 ch 1, | abuseYOU MUST WRITE MORE! I heart your poetry!! Itz aweshome! Itz so SAD! and truthful, depressing, etc. etc. I luf teh rhyming yeh did wif dis. I'm looking forward ter reading MORE! of yer work!Please R&R some of meh poetry! Sayonara!! pyrofiregirl101 |