I had always found haiku to be amongst one of the most intricate forms of poetry. So little words possessing so much more than what meets the eye. Your haiku does exactly this. The situation portrayed like a haiku is complex. It is rather vague – but it allows for interpretation – and I think I have some idea of what is being said. The few words are striking and vivid to the reader – intense - instigating images and with that emotion. ‘Stone’, ‘womb’, ‘empty’, ‘midnight’ and ‘dawn’ – I am reminded of life and death, broken and whole. Perhaps the most overwhelming emotion for me whilst reading this haiku is sheer hopelessness.

Cheers – Autumn.

Beautiful, thats all I can say...

well, that was a break from the ordinary blah, yawn obvious haiku that inundates these hallowed pages, very cool.

Deep, emotional and intensely moving piece achieved with so few words..

VERY WELL DONE

KEEP WRITING!

F.C

Great poem.

I also like the title you gave it.

Keep Writing.

I really like the questions and images this evokes - Why does he fall? Agaisnt your womb - suggesting a child, a baby or festus, or is this upon the outside of your body? Why is midnight empty, or for that matter, what is an empty midnight - silence? darkness? Very mysterious. Structurally, my only suggesstion would be to change the line break for your second line. End it on 'empty, and allow your last line to be - like the midnight of our dawn. Last, thanks for the review of my poem, The Designer, and thanks for posting.

what a nice simple little poem!

short and powerful

This is short, but still so powerful. Love it.

enchanting, simply enchangting, so many ways to interpret.

That flows really nicely. I liked it. I'm returning the favor, of when you reviewed some of my poems. thanks. much love, blackbird

Dearest Juliet. I always admire your work I do hope to speak to you soon. I have been on an absence lately and for that I apologize.

Great job even if it is pain your pen drips ink...

Farewell

oh ..this is just beyond beautiful i love it and now im speechless

Audri

Nice choice of words...I like.

If you're talking about what I think you are then this is quite a scary poem. Its briefness is not only haunting but intriguing... and I'm guessing it's something that is troubling you quite a it's very precisely written, and poetically I think it's brilliant.