Well I liked the title, and the word NaNoWriMo intrigues me for some reason. So I might as well give this story a look-see huh?

Okay well the early introduction to the characters leaves me with a sour taste in my mouth. We have the cockney (who used to play rugby, no doubt), the Floridian (who is, of course, a 'typical' beach blonde), the Russian (well, at least her name isn't Natalya), the black guy (I'm hoping he won't die first), and the handsome American?

Seems a bit...standard? Maybe some character development will go on later in the story but they seem so...two dimensional as of now. Try and plump them up a bit. Give one of them bad breath, give Tamara a prosthetic leg. I dunno, do something different. Your writing isn't that bad, but your characters are already dragging you down. And poor characters are only for the people who write poorly. Poor. Poorly. Yeah.

Ah yes. The Democrats. Everyone hates the Republicans, even in the future it seems...

So they're dead? It took me a while to figure that out. Oh and I love the motive, real mature for an astronaut. Okay fine, I'll put up with the motive, but the way you wrote it was a bit too casual. If you had put quotation marks at the beggining and end then that paragraph might have been a bit more appropriate, but as a third person statement from an omniscient being it sounds a bit silly.

Stating the more personal reasons of the murder/suicide are unrealistic for a preliminary conference. Those kind of details are released long after everything is a 100% down pat.

Again with the characters! First of all they're way too multi-cultural. Sure ethnic blending and multi-culturalism are popular, but certain jobs attract certain types of people. And having people from every continent in one room is unneccesary and strangely amateurish. Research the area that the story is set in and base the auxiliary characters off of the most prominent culture in that area. Also, auxiliary characters don't need a full name but some description would be nice. Example: A knock came AT the door, and his secretary, a plump Latino woman with a mountain of Chaquita hair, stepped inside. Okay so that wasn't a major change, but sometimes the best part of a story is the minute details.

If it's in Texas, put some fat people in there. Don't make in painfully obvious like "They traveled through the glowing core that was downtown Houston, marveling at the obese populace." Okay that was a bad example, and Houston doesn't really have a downtown, but still. Texas is fat now, and it won't be any better in the future.

"His wife was a big woman, tall, with broad shoulders and a plus sized frame. The media sneered that she wasn’t the type of wife that an American astronaut should have, and many of NASA’s bureaucrats felt the same way." Okay. Okay. Now THAT was a good sentence. Try and be a little bit more like that. She's big. That's unusual in stories, but so so so normal in the real world. You're messing with me Jason, you're really messing with me. And that's good. Get inside the reader's mind and take an egg beater to it.

*whistles* That sex scene was a real turn on, to be sure. Haha nah just kidding. That guy must feel like ** in the morning.

You make several references to modern directors at the end. So it's the future, and these people actually know who Terry Gilliam is? Sure he directed the Grimm movie, but I don't think even people who watched that know who he is. North Americans (well, Canadians and Americans) have an incredibly short memory in not just history. Rapid pop-culture is another one of our weaknesses as well. Terry Gilliam directed Brazil, well la-dee-da, no one even knows who or what that is these days. If you're going to make a comment like that, stick with the famous ones. Steven Speilberg, M. Night Shyamalan, James Cameron, Uwe Boll. Well, not the last one.

Overall this was okay. At first it doesn't really appear to be a memorable kind of a story. In terms of spacing and writing it was very well done, but it lacks real meat. Hopefully I'm wrong on that one. I'll keep reading to find out. And if you aren't too mad at my rude and self-entertaining review maybe you could check out a couple of my stories? Give 'em a read and tell me what you think. Review numbers are always nice.