Very nice beginning with realistic technology.

Interesting, even a self aware machine doesn't like to be watched.

Good job!! *_*

Thank you JaveHarron for your kind words -- but the Chinese!! Oh my, I have so many different parties involved here (you've only seen a few of them so far) that I'm afraid the Chinese may get left out. I'll have to see where I can fit them in. Hmm... ... well, I'll see what I can do.

Writing this story in one month for NanoWrimo is pretty challenging. It feels like I'm overwhelmed and as if this thing is going out of control. Hopefully, things will work out well in the end, and everyone will enjoy the story.

Of course, I would love to hear what anybody thinks so far. I just love reading those reviews!! And thanks for taking the time to read the story too!

I love the technology so far. Will the Chinese rivalry play into the story at all?

I like this storyline. The politics and technology both seem very interesting.

Thanks so much Natanna! I've fixed those two mistakes now. I found the correct word is "hairbreadth". I wonder how long I've lived with the wrong word up in my brain. "Breadth *does* make so much more sense than "breath"! It's funny how those things are.

I hope everyone is enjoying my story. I'd love to hear what things people like, and what things seem poor. Thanks!

small stuff:

..“Hmm…”, seemed to pause reflecting... --> missing name?

..the world has been a hair-breath away..--> isn't it "hair-breadth"? (not sure on this one though)

Oh, so you're doing NaNoWriMo, too? Nice to meet you. I think that you have a very interesting concept. Review my story, The Faye Syndrome, please. It'd help to have another novelist take a look at it.

hey... so you're nano-ing again! =)

So far so good. Skipped some paragraphs on the first chapter though.. little too techy.

All the best!

Nice and creative. I would have to say however, that some of the events happen too fast, and there is not a lot of emotional ares though it was nicely done when it was there.