There is nothing scarier than to not have stability in a relationship. If you don't know if someone is displeased with something in your relationship, but just endures; while leaving you random insightful notes everywhere, but never telling you what's wrong. I guess I don't like people who keep things inside, all the time. The story was wonderful and I love how you made Y.T. a mystery and Daniel wanting something to take care of and keep, like his fish, but Y.T. was always mysterious about everything including his name. I'm glad that they had a happy ending , for now. Le Sigh! Thanks You for sharing you excellent stories.

I don't remember where, but I saw a review in which this story was suggested and I gave it a try. I haven't read the original yet but I do intend upon it now. It's truly beautiful and I just can't quite grasp why. It is one of my favorite (very) short stories I have read. I really don't know what to say.
Y.T. is this beautifully enigmatic character, to the point that I can almost believe why other readers/reviewers believed he was all in the character's head. But at the same time, there is something there that I think speaks of human flaw as much as this profound wiseness. I personally want to believe (and actually do believe) he is very much real. There is something there, like a slight scratch on the surface or whisper or something, that tells me that Y.T. just has to be real. I don't know why.
This is going to the favorites for sure. And now I'm off to check your other writing.

Thank you!
I liked the original and the remix better because the addition clarified why YT left. I noticed that the ending "Y.T. is wearing the same striped scarf as four days ago." was not edited to match the addition. A month has elapsed, not four days.
Does YT stand for "Yours Truly"?

I am not a good enough writer to give out any sort of helpful criticism, but I hope it's enough to say that someone read this and enjoyed it a lot.

i have a very strange urge to cry.

Very dream-like. I enjoy the story, although I can't figure out if Y.T. is real or not . . . I think I'll have to read this one again.

Livi

...I am floored. This is the best story I have ever read. and I think I ever will read. I wish I could write 1/3rd as good as you do. you should make a collection of short storys. and I would buy it for 100 dollars. (if I had that much)Analeigh.

As a rule, I already like most of your work. But for this one, I have to say that I thought the the original was better.

There is nothing negative to be said about the writing in either. There are so many things I loved about the theme of both stories. When I find the time, I promise I will write a another one of my shit reviews for the original.

Backtracking to the first thing I said -- I can't put this into any lucid form of explanation, but I'm going to make a really misguided attempt. Just that the overall [i]feeling[/i] of the first was better? the embodiment? Ack, I give up. I don't know. I just think that this one employs a bit of a force feeding technique in rough contrast to the original and having obviously read the other... (I mean 'force feeding' not in a strictly negative attitude, but where the more concrete parts takes away from some of the enigmatic or bittersweet sense, and room for interpretation).

But seriously, what do I know? I haven't even graduated highschool yet. So I'm going to shut up now, and leave you alone. Maybe I completely missed the point. ::shrug::

Still, your writing is truly awe inspiring in places where the words are translucent to more than one possible implication. [For the lack of a better word, it's multifaceted].

OK, shutting up now. Bye, and thanks for reading this.

Man, I loved the first one, and I loved this verion, too. Both of them are so odd and enigmatic. I liked the first one because those qualities were really strong in it. This one is great because it's more fleshed out and concrete (though not enough to lose its mystery). Freaking adore it.

I think it's beautiful. I liked the first version as well, but I do agree that this one flows a bit more, and is much less abrupt. Lovely.

~Sasa

you write beautifully, a rare sight on fictionpress. very compelling. promise me you'll never stop writing.

hmm...have you ever read Melville's "Bartleby the Scrivener?"

This piece is really sad. It's one of those where you feel like the relationship between the two characters is just too unhealthy, despite its beauty.

Hm...Truly is a name...have you eve seen Chitty Chitty Bang Bang?

i think the fish's name should be delusional. it sounds like y.t. is all in his head to me. but that could be because my brain is fried from labs but i'll probly still think so tomorrow. ah well. esp with the boss thing

Wow. That was really powerful.

I loved the proverbs! I wish someone would leave them for ME to find! That is so unbelievably sweet, just that fact that Y.T. took the time to find them and put them in different places.

What I'm wondering, is how big of a fish tank do they have? Sheesh! Perhaps more than one? Something tells me there's something more to the fish thing, but I just don't know. It was a nice added detail.

You never really state their relationship, but you can just tell how much they mean to each other through your writing- Y.T and his proverbs, also the fact that every fish was bought BECAUSE of Y.T. So sweet.

The end was weird- how Y.T. finished the main character's thought. Wonderful ending.

To make a long story short: I really REALLY liked it! I can't wait to read your new story that you'll be putting up soon! CAN'T WAIT! Expect a review babe, 'cause you're getting one.

Dr. P.