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teh tarik 2006-08-15 . chapter 1
and it's been eons since i last visited this site - i love this! the delicate imagery and the alliteration and the way it sounds when read aloud ^_^ (yes i did read it aloud)
With Rhyme and Reason 2005-12-27 . chapter 1
"strung as space tinsel"

That made me think of a Christmas tree the first time I read it, but now I understand how it relates to the Milky Way (not criticism, just my own stupidity, ha). Nice job with the form.
simpleplan13 2005-11-06 . chapter 1
beautiful imagery
poetic abortion 2005-11-02 . chapter 1
ohmygod. ohmygod. ohmygod.

you UPDATED.

**SQUEE**

alright, teenage hormones/insanity aside; I love this. you always make haikus so frivalous and easy to construct when they are so HARD and rot the brain (my opinion. sorry if it offends). I just lovelovelovelove the first line, as it had me giggling for some time, and the second line equally. I am quite pleased with the ending. sums it up rather nicely. oh. and.the.title.is.PERFECT.

~* noelle
Elraralia 2005-11-02 . chapter 1
I am always excessively diverted by the use of "Milky Way" but that's just me being an egghead.

I like it! I never know how to critique haikus, but yup, I like it!
Faithless Juliet 2005-11-02 . chapter 1
I like it; keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.
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