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| Maranwe Telrunya 2006-10-05 ch 1,  | abuseThe first half and the second half (split between "Now it starts to clear beyond your eyes/See things in their correct size") don't really blend too well. The first half is comforting, flowing, quiet, and the second half it choppy, and doesn't quite make sense. Maybe it's just me. =D Maranwe Telrunya |